Saiyuki drabble.
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aquabeanMuse abandonment is not an issue I have to deal with often, but when it does happen, it's painful. This time the return has been slow, coming in fits and starts, but at least they're (he's) trying.
Title: Apology
Author: rune*
Words: 100
Summary: Some things are easier than words.
Clean clothes, folded, lay on the chair next to the his bed. His papers and maps rested in several neat piles on the small table below the window, each weighted by some small item; an ashtray, empty, a book, the small brass compass he'd sworn he'd lost. Even the beds were made, though one looked neater than the other, wrinkled as it was by the man atop the blankets, worry creasing his brow, even in his sleep.
Hakkai stood in the doorway, Gojyo had never really been one to say he was sorry, but he got the point across anyhow.
Title: Apology
Author: rune*
Words: 100
Summary: Some things are easier than words.
Clean clothes, folded, lay on the chair next to the his bed. His papers and maps rested in several neat piles on the small table below the window, each weighted by some small item; an ashtray, empty, a book, the small brass compass he'd sworn he'd lost. Even the beds were made, though one looked neater than the other, wrinkled as it was by the man atop the blankets, worry creasing his brow, even in his sleep.
Hakkai stood in the doorway, Gojyo had never really been one to say he was sorry, but he got the point across anyhow.
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Date: 2005-01-30 04:14 am (UTC)Both of the wibbly kind and of the literary respect kind.
Only ditzy criticisms: I think the first comma in the last line was supposed to be a period? Also, correct "item" (pluralize it) in the second sentence.
::ruffles Gojyo-muse's hair while he sleeps:: I can tell he means well. Here's hoping that he wakes up soon, and still in his cooperative mood.
*WIBBLE*
Date: 2005-01-30 05:44 am (UTC)It left such a feeling with me I'm not even going to nitpick on grammar. Wow that was sweet.
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Date: 2005-01-30 07:58 am (UTC)Re: *WIBBLE*
Date: 2005-01-31 09:53 pm (UTC)Also, this is what happens when I'm in too much of a hurry to spell check. *wry grin* Hopefully it's fixed now, yes?
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Date: 2005-01-31 09:56 pm (UTC)Actually, yeah, there was some fixing that needed to be done. The commas were okay, but the spelling was pretty sad. Should be fixed now.
*grins* I appreciate that you read closely enough to have con-crit to make. Can't make a better writer without work.