One crit, and one crit only: And then the bastard “didn’t sneeze” again.
I can't make grammatical sense of whether you're actually missing a verb, but it feels like it. "And then the bastard not-sneezed again", perhaps - simply because any other construction I tried, leaving the quotes around 'sneeze', all ended up feeling the same lack of verbage.
In general: Wet Roy - No, Wet Mustang, and the cat being there to take the object of the tones that would have defaulted over to Roy (irresistible wet cat) were it not there and.....
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Date: 2005-11-12 04:19 am (UTC)One crit, and one crit only: And then the bastard “didn’t sneeze” again.
I can't make grammatical sense of whether you're actually missing a verb, but it feels like it. "And then the bastard not-sneezed again", perhaps - simply because any other construction I tried, leaving the quotes around 'sneeze', all ended up feeling the same lack of verbage.
In general: Wet Roy - No, Wet Mustang, and the cat being there to take the object of the tones that would have defaulted over to Roy (irresistible wet cat) were it not there and.....
*grins* Thanks. This thing's so true.